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Workshop Time

I got some great feedback at the Writer’s Group tonight. It’s a group of awesome people that work at Mahalo. We get together every Tuesday and read each other’s work. They’ve been reading North Shore South Shore since I joined the group in the fall of 2007.

Here’s what I learned about my work:

I need to give my “hero” Matt a bigger presence earlier in the book.

I need to cut back on my narrator Ben’s “love” of Kylie. He’s in love with Matt’s twin sister and I need to keep that at the forefront.

I need to get to the big conversation at the elevator sooner. It’s my narrative hook. It’s starts the real action so it should come sooner.

I’m making progress though.


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